Looking good Angie! I like lucie's drawing suggestions. I also feel if you are going to do act 2 and 3 you shouldn't reveal what is "really" bothering Don. I'd keep that as an inner struggle until end of act 2 or maybe beginning of act 3.
Lastly Grandpa jack I'm not sure would use terms like "warm my heart", Just don't know if that's his character. What do you guys think?
Love grandpa jacks death scene. Just would like to know how you are gonna work out him cursing Don when he passes. Keep it up.
Now that you mention that about Jack, I agree. I'm not sure what he would say instead. Something a little more witty to encourage him maybe. I'll try to think of something lol
Looking good Angie! I like lucie's drawing suggestions. I also feel if you are going to do act 2 and 3 you shouldn't reveal what is "really" bothering Don. I'd keep that as an inner struggle until end of act 2 or maybe beginning of act 3.
ReplyDeleteLastly Grandpa jack I'm not sure would use terms like "warm my heart", Just don't know if that's his character. What do you guys think?
Love grandpa jacks death scene. Just would like to know how you are gonna work out him cursing Don when he passes. Keep it up.
Now that you mention that about Jack, I agree. I'm not sure what he would say instead. Something a little more witty to encourage him maybe. I'll try to think of something lol
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